The chart below compares the numbers of male and female executives in different age ranges in Star World, a large IT company. Us

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问题 The chart below compares the numbers of male and female executives in different age ranges in Star World, a large IT company.
Using the information from the chart, write a short report comparing the ages of the male and female executives within the company.
Write 120-140 words.

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答案Sample A This report aims at comparing the ages of the male and female executives in Star World, a large IT company. As can be seen from the chart, most of executives are in the age range of 40-49 and 50-59, totally number are 57 and 58 respectively. The number of male and female executives are almost equal in the age range of 40-49, however, there are 39 male executives in 50-59, more than that 19 of the female’s. Then, most females are 30-39, with the number 39, almost 4 times to that 9 of the males. While in 60-69, male executives are still more than females, the rate is 21:10. In the end, the least number comes from 24-29 as well as 70-79, both have only 4 executives. While there are 1 male and 3 females in 24-29, and only 4 males in 70-79. Band 2 All the content points are covered, but although the organisation is adequate, this is a band 2 script because of the limited range and poor control of language. Sample B The report analises the numbers of male and female managers in different age groups in Star World. The company employs almost an equal number of executives of both sexes. However, there are remarkable differences depending on the age range considered. Female executives dominate in the age group between 24 and 39, where the ratio is 42 to just 10, the first representing the number of women and the latter - men. Nevertheless, in the age range above 40 male executives are in majority. Although in group 40 to 49 the split is slight(29 male executives to 28 female), amongst older managers men starkly dominate. The difference reaches 20 in range 50 to 59, with 39 male directors and 19 female directors. It decreases half in group 60 to 69, where 10 women hold top position in comparison to 21 men. Yet in the last age group, 70 to 79, female executives are absent. It solely consists of 4 male managers. Band 5 This script shows good control and natural use of language, including a wide range of structures and vocabulary, and effective cohesion. It has a very positive effect on the target reader.

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